Ode To Cookies

20 02 2008

Crunchy

Munchy

Tasty Cookie

Mushy

Bumpy

Lumpy Cookies

Your smell so sweet

Your smell so great

After i eat you up, u energize me.

Even though I feel thirsty after I eat up,

I feel so happy!!!!

Your fresh scent after u came out of the oven,

Was so great that it made my tummy growl!!

21 02 2008: eemansorce (12:31:01) :

Pradinya, i think you had the right idea going but it was to short, i think you could have done a lot more organizational wise.

-Eeman
21 02 2008: christianlavery (13:06:48) :

OH IM SO HUNGRY
21 02 2008: siobhansorce (16:37:12) :

interesting
why a cookie
was it by english class
when we ate the cookies
well i still like it
it is soooo……
PRADINYA
25 02 2008: margalitsorce (13:29:01) :

I think you are on the right track…good job!!

- Margalit
25 02 2008: mayasorce (13:51:02) :

it rhymed a lot, it was good… i thought it was supposed to be at least 30 lines!!!!

but otherwise good
25 02 2008: jessiesorce (13:51:46) :

I made cookies (like a billion times) and it smelled GREAT!!!-jessie
28 03 2008: nasirajohnson (12:42:56) :

C00ki3z R aW3s0m3!!!!!
iT wAs A $h0rT bUt niC3….
K33p 0n k33piN’ 0n…

- Nasira ♥
4 04 2008: orlynsorce (10:23:45) :

It’s nice. But the “u”s should be “you”’s and I think their needs to be an ending in sequence. Like eating it. The beginning sounds like a song! “It’s crunchy! Munchy! And Chocolaty! I’m cookoo for coco puffs!” It is more fun to sing than to read.

BlOgStEr